Tenyo

Um... I'm not really sure what to make of this chapter. I read it a few days ago, read it today, and re-read it slowly, but there's quite a lot ...

I apologise for skipping the reviews of chapter three and part one of chapter for, because I didn't want to repeat myself. I'll commend you for the story, it is ...

I think this is better than the previous chapters, but there is still much work to be done. I'd say that's mainly on the characters. There are a Lot of ...

As with the prologue, this first chapter seems to be lacking. Amanda is horrible, which means a lot of people wouldn't want her around, and it would seem reasonable that ...

That's a lot of reviews you have already... But, as requested; As a prologue, I'd say this isn't really suitable, to be honest. A prologue needs to give your reader ...

Review number five! I like Darius :D I'm not entirely sure why, I think perhaps because his casual pessimism makes him quite amusing. I especially love how you've described his ...

And again we have returned to that brilliant standard of writing. Emily is a great character in that she is just as unique and vivid as all the others. I ...

Uh-ohh. I'm afraid this won't be a particularly nice review. One of the problems you face being a talented writer, is high expectations. When your work drops down to standard, ...

Ohh this is so cool! Okay, first of all- more things I like about this. In such a short space of time you've created characters that are so vivid. It ...

Ohh, so part (0) was the prologue. I like how you've linked these two parts together by the subtle mention of Vara. As said previously, your style of writing is ...

Hey there! I'm here to review your novel :D To start, I honesty wasn't expecting this piece to be as good as I found it. It's brilliantly written, it has ...

How do I review this... I can't really find much to comment on, again, so I apologise for not being very helpful. I guess this means I'll have to start ...

Haha! I like this a lot :D At first I was thinking this story was a little too preachy. As I continued reading though I found it quite refreshing. Because ...

Hey there! I'm here to review your novel :D As a first chapter this isn't particularly gripping, but it did draw me in. I quite like the characters, there's quite ...

I like it :) A lot of the work I read these days tends to be over-passionate and filled with long words stuffed between poorly written sentences. This was quite ...