Tenyo

Hey there Bigfoot! The first thing I found about this was it was difficult, and daunting to read. One of the things you must be aware of is your audiance. ...

I kind of like this. I think I would like it more as a short story though. It has a good narrative to it, but not the kind that is ...

I like it! This poem is a little short, but it works. I can't think of anything to be critical about, and I think if I were to list my ...

I love it! This is hilarious. I feel obliged, since this is a critique, to comment on one thing. Hogwarts is a school for witches and wizards, and you don't ...

Is this supposed to be a comedy? I can't really tell. The 'silky, sexy voice' and 'sculptured chest' made me laugh though. Some parts reminded me of those old James ...

Hiya! I'm going to be extreme on this. First of all, this is all too narrative. 'I did this, then I did this, then I did that.' I used to ...

Umm... Wow? This is... I'm not sure what to make of it XD It sounds very logical and contemplatively written. There are some parts I don't understand, but... I guess ...

Oo, this is slightly captivating. I like the scattered thoughts, and the poem as a whole. I'm not sure if I'm too keen on the short lines though. Because they're ...

I love it! I first looked at this poem because I thought it had an interesting title, and the poem didn't let me down. It's very creative. I love the ...

Hey Arrie! I like this. I know a chestboard and a battlefield can be a little cliched, but this was somehow different. You got your point across in a very ...

Review part three! I found very little to fix in this chapter, so I'm going to be fussy. No, no. Words that a repeated consequetively need a commar in between ...

Review part two: The fight scene I'm not sure about Clays comment on the fight scene. It could be dragged out, but there's only so much you can put into ...

Opening: I like the idea of the opening. It instantly gripped me. It seems to be phrased oddly though. I had to read it over a few times to understand ...

Here's a critique! The opening. I like the whole 'warm sun cool wind' thing at the beginning, it took me straight into the story. You might want to make it ...

Hey Write! This is depressing :( Darkness, desolation and misery is not something people really want to empathise with, and it won't make them too optimistic about reading the rest ...