Tenyo

Review Part Two: Word Tag Syndrome- It's the name writers give to the habit of using lots of fancy word tags like 'boomed' and 'whispered' all the time, when 'said' ...

Hey Crimson! I've here to review your novel! The glitch monster ate my review the first time I typed it out, so if anything here doesn't click together, feel free ...

This is very interesting. Is it based on a previously written story or is it a stand-alone piece of work? There's just enough hints to tell a story behind it, ...

I like it :D At some parts of this I was completely engrossed int he story and this world you've created, but I'll move on to th epositives later. First; ...

Woah, this is long, kid! You got to chapter eighteen, I commend you! But in order to make this a little more manageable for reviewers, I would suggest posting it ...

Aww :( This is sad. I understand the theme and idea, but you said this was only allowed to be a page double spaced right? So, it's like poetry in ...

Hey Leth! To start: This is an awesome first chapter. It caught my attention right away, and kept it all the way through. You've done a great job of creating ...

Back for the last two. Part nine: I can't find much to comment on the style of part nine, but there seems to be one issue popping up. Facts. If ...

Me again. Part five: You don't really need that break in between the two parts, since the second one is very short anyway, and part of the same scene. At ...

Ello again! So, where to start? Viewpoints from a point of view Changing viewpoint can be very disruptive - imagine suddenly switching from a grown adult to that of a ...

Hey Pointe! I'm here to plague- I mean, review, your novel. Positives To start, there are parts in this I really like. "I could feel my face grow red ... ...

Is this actually a schollarship essay? For what? In all honesty this has "I'm a writer" scorched across it in big yellow letters. I'm not sure if that was your ...

Hey Sura! Turtle vomit? Haha. I will say simply that yes, these do seem like a collection of random thoughts, and I think if you were to try to combine ...

Hey Milk! So I'm the first person to review the first chapter of your novel, I feel privilaged! So, presentation, presentation. This is really long. Long posts tend to scare ...

Hey cheese! Fascinating use of imagery, htouhg I'm not sure if it's in a positive way... I agree with Paladin, undressing with great velocity is strange, if not humerous. I ...