Tenyo

Hi Queenie! Aw man, this is so good! I think it's been a while since I read any of your work, but you've improved so much since I last did. ...

Hi Biluata! I have to say, I really like some of your other poetry but I think I prefer your free-verse. There's something beautifully melancholy about this piece, and it ...

Duude, this is so weird. I love it! It seems like everything has a purpose, and the interlocking themes are really satisfying to my spider-web brain. The juxtaposition of very ...

Hi Pen! This is a really good opening chapter. There's drama and tension, and that really gripping, quiet secret so casually hidden behind the stage curtains. I think it might ...

Hey Jessee Great opening! My favourite opening lines are the ones that say a lot in a teeny tiny space, and "I'm the only one left" instantly takes me into ...

Hey Gardevite! I like this poem a lot! For me I enjoy poetry that covers a lot of ground, and in this you've woven together comradeship, parenthood and romantic love, ...

Hey linkzdude! It's already been critiqued that this doesn't quite fit into the format of an essay. Of course your opinion matters as much as everybody else's, but as an ...

Hey Mori! The what's and the why's It's really important when you're writing a historical essay/article that you go into the why's as well as the what's. This in particular: ...

Hey Art! Happy review day! Commas Ease up on them a little. Commas are used to merge two ideas or clauses into one (except when you use them in lists ...

Rawr! Characters and plot Characters are so important in the first few chapters. If you don't get the right ones in the right place and build some kind of connection ...

Hey Fort! Happy review day! I'm going to pretend I don't already know what's going to happen next ;] Prologue You fell for it, didn't you. You did the prologue ...

Greetings my woefully neglected Warrior! Last chapter I said that Obi was looking really flat. He's not as awesome as your other characters, but there is definitely an improvement here. ...

Meeeg! How am I supposed to critique this? Okay, plot. Using a Mistress to teach someone how to be a spy. Is. Genius. Although I keep skipping backwards to her ...

Am I so far behind? I'm sorry! Okay. Chapter Three. My gosh that was tense! I think my heart skipped a beat when Obi started yelling, that was pretty scary. ...

Hey GDrama97! Here by request =] POV? Is Tom the 'I' in the beginning? That's kind of confusing. The easiest way is to decide whether you want it in third ...