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Re: You can't buy me over
Hey, welcome to YWS, I'm Telina. I must say, I really liked this. I don't review poems as much as I should but I write some and I wish I ...
Mar 22, 2009 -
Re: Queen of Water
I'm look around a small portion of my domain I look around a small portion of my domain As I look around me own the pebble strewn floor I spot ...
Mar 11, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic- CHAPTER 5
“Why are you? What! Do not be sorry. Its fine, I understand this,” he pointed to him and me, “Isn’t going to be easy. Come here.” You should describe how ...
Mar 5, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic. CHAPTER 4
It took us about 30 minutes to reach the mystery destination. It was nice feeling the wind blowing in my hair and the adrenaline pumping through my veins . Forgive ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: Disneyland Romance
Okay so I read this piece and I really think you need to go back and see how you can make this better. You need to work on description and ...
Feb 3, 2009 -
Re: The Yellow Box in Hara
Those nights you wasted lying awake in bed Staring at the window when nothing else was said What happened to all the yesterdays, I wonder Oh I love this part! ...
Feb 3, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic- CHAPTER 3 - Edited.
My eyes nearly fell out of my head. My hand fluttered uselessly over his beautiful body, not sure what to do. As if a switch had been flicked inside my ...
Feb 3, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic - CHAPTER 2!! ---Revised
You're taking this down a really good path, I like the plot so far, I just wish you would make their relationship a little better, you'll see what I mean ...
Jan 31, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic
The buildings were in piles of rubble on the ground, the soil was dug up so it faced the sun, and people, dead people, lined the sidewalks. This sentence had ...
Jan 31, 2009
