Tealessence

Hello, Tealessence here for reviewing. : ) When I review, I point out all grammar stuff, things I like, things I think could maybe be changed for the better, or ...

“Yet here I was [am]. It was [is] a gloomy sort of beautiful; specks of sun found [find] their way through the branches, shining on the mossy ground like pieces ...

“He's dead, the hunters found him and they've killed him.” Comma splice. I think a semicolon would work best here. “I let any thoughts of Arthur move into the darkest ...

Tealessence back for reviewing! As I’ve done before, I’m going to make suggestions as well as comments, or I might just illustrate my reaction to things. That way you can ...

“The highest tower of the palace could still be seen … It illustrated the useless grandiose style the current monarchs favored.” Really good description here. Describing a tower to illustrate ...

“Qui’in dawdled on the way to the queen’s room as she always did when her friend wasn’t with her…” Okay, so Qui’in is the queen’s friend, I’m assuming. “… glad ...

Tealessence back for reviewing! “Qui'in stood on the steps out of the huge palace doors, trying to look cool even as the heat waves rose off of the metal cars ...

The first 3 sentences really drew me in. Great start! “He was a nice guy looking for…” At this point I was cringing and preparing for an info dump on ...

Tealessence back for reviewing! I'm just going to quote particular sections and comment on them. "Their grave is covered in moss and grime; I should feel ashamed for not coming ...

I really like how you're revealing Foxglove's character. It's very intriguing and keeps me interested in her as a character. The workings of this society are also very interesting... very ...

Wow! You really caught my interest! This is probably the most interesting story I've reviewed all night. Somehow you got the info dump just right so that I actually enjoyed ...

Excellent free-verse poem. It flows very nicely; your phrases are separated so that nothing sticks out too much or too little. It's perfectly balanced. I love the... what's the word ...

I love your opening; it just flowed so smoothly and you were consistent with that theme as it went on. Right now I'm wondering why codename Cerberus is helping Ragnorak ...

Overall: awesome again. Your descriptive language is great; I really enjoy reading your writing style. Great similes and metaphors... what else can I say? Aside from a few typos or ...

Finally! A first chapter of a fantasy story that SHOWS me and doesn't TELL me! THANK YOU. Your writing style is refined and enjoyable. I really loved the description of ...