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Hehe! Aww, this one was cute. I think I might just have to diagram this so I get a better idea of what exactly happened, lol. But cute, fun little ...

Uhm... interesting? Lol. Some interesting comparisons you make here -- the yellow and pink and puppies and stuff. You hate puppies? Really? Lol. Interesting. I'm not sure they fit with ...

Thanks for letting me practise on your poem, Fire! ^_^ Not every line needs a comma at the end, deary. In fact in your... *counts* ninth line? The comma is ...

As per your request, love! ^_^ *tilts head* Interesting... Er. Yeah. Interesting. Definitely interesting. Short, sweet, and to the point, although I'm not sure what said point is? Lol. It's ...

Whoa... this piece is over a year old and yet no reviews. I should fix that! :D *Random note* Does the manager have a name? *reads* Oh, never mind. "Yeah, ...

Hey Bella! You'll have to let me know how things went today. :) A deep breath fills my nose with his scent, the scent of new fallen rain. Newly fallen ...

Hey Fish! First attempt at fantasy, eh? Go you for branching out! :D Standing quickly upwards, "Standing up quickly" might help with fluency here. *Random note* This is written in ...

Aye, I agree with Alainna. This would be much better as a haiku -- I can't really see it as a full length poem, but that might just be beacuse ...

As per your request! ^_^ “ Perfect!",the word finally came. Get rid of the comma and put a space there. “Okay then” Needs a period. Blake unvolunatily took a step ...

Hey there! Have I seen you around before? Meh, can't remember. Bad memory. Anyway, I'm Saint and I shall be your critiquer today! :D *Random note* Doctors don't usually examine ...

Hello there! I don't think I've seen you around YWS before. My name is Saint and I shall be your critiquer today. :D *Random note* Your sentence fluency needs work ...

Yo yo yo, TN! How's it going? :D Kimmy slowly walked towards the mailbox praying to see a letter from her baby’s father, praying he was alive and well. The ...

Hey, I think I've seen you around YWS a few times. How's it been? :D Ehh... I'm not entirely in love with your intro? Does it really relate to your ...

As you ordered, Sir Dono. =P Lol. You and your obsession with guns. The memory was all to clear in his mind–he wouldn’t be sleeping anytime soon. All too* clear. ...

Ghostwriter, please please PLEASE do four critiques before posting any more of your work. It is a rule here, and while I am not a moderator, I do not want ...