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Flemkylezo! You know, in all the time I've known you I've never read anything you've written. So I thought, "I should fix that!" [/semi-ramble] Anyway... The sun rose over the ...

Aye, spacing here is a problem! Please try to space out your paragraphs like I'm doing here. Makes things easier on the eyes and, consequently, easier to critique. It's simply ...

Aye, this needs to be spaced out in order to be properly critiqued. It's a bit of an eyesore now. Send me a PM when you've spaced this out (preferably ...

Ahoy there! Haven't seen you around before; I can see you're new. Welcome aboard YWS! My name is Razorblade. :D Anyway, the biggest complaint I have right now is your ...

Just sent mine! Check your e-mail. :D -St. Razorblade The Official YWS Pirate :pirate1:

Ah! My inebriated mus musculus. Ahoy! Anyway, the biggest problem right now is that I can't read this! The spacing is painful on the eyes. See how I'm putting a ...

Ahoy there! Welcome aboard YWS, I see that you are a fairly new member. My name is Razorblade. :D Shadowsun is correct in saying that this needs to be longer ...

Sorry I didn't get back to this sooner, I was pretty busy yesterday. Anyway, holy crackers! Your ending is just... so... very... holy chip. It took a brief moment for ...

Ahoy there! Haven't seen you around before, welcome to YWS! My name is Razorblade. :D This is nice! A bit on the short side with a bit of an anticlimactic ...

Well, your ideas and descriptions are nice, but there's nothing here for me to critique! Not enough meat to sink my teeth into. The first thing on your to-do list ...

It's a bit rushed, but overall it's well written. There's not much else I can say because there isn't much here, but I'd like to see you continue on with ...

This is... really odd. Erm, there's not a lot that I can sink my teeth into. It's kind of incoherent and hard to follow. I'm sure your ideas would be ...

I fail at critiquing poetry, but I am a spelling Nazi. Slightly sideways out of synch Sync* It kind of irritates me how no one seems to know how to ...

I'd love to give this a proper critique, but the solid block paragraphs are giving me a headache. So, a quick grammar lesson for you! When you have dialogue, you ...

I'm terrible with poetry, so my words don't carry much weight, but hey. I agree with Brad and Colleen that it's kind of... iffy. And they know what they're talking ...