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I agree complealty that it is to rushed but this piece of writing was for my writing course so I was restricted to 500 to 600 words which is not ...

Thanks I'll take that on board i see what your saying.

One word wounderful not much more to say I couldnt find a fault well done.

I like it an interesting idea.

Thanks guys much appreciated.

Beyond fantastic, you write beyond your age. I loved the imagry it made the story come alive. I was on the edge of my seat. keep writing your going to ...

Powerful piece, really drew me in. I couldn't find any flaws so thats why this critique is so short. Congratulations on creating such a good read.

I'm afraid it was so short I couldnt follow what you where on about the fisrt lines discription was good but try and extend it as it was so short ...

I thought this poem was fantastic it captured me right to the end.

Very interesting it captivated me. I just couldnt stop reading the imegrey was fantstic.

I loved this it flowed well

I thought the poem was great except the ending needs some work

I am amazed no one else has comented it ws fantastic discription really drew the reader in.

It had a lot of emotion i loved it imensley

Good piece i liked it imesly.