TaylaChase

Hiya! This was really good and I liked the way you wrote it! I have a couple of things for you that I found, though. 'a color all its one ...

Hi, This was really intriguing! It really pulled the reader in. I liked the ending, too. You say that they would get her if she even moved, but you start ...

Hi, This was very intriguing! I really liked it. The way you wrote it really draws the reader in. ...a soldier, dirty, grim and with leery eyes.... This is just ...

Hi I really like your idea on this story! I think you should continue on it and make it longer. It was a little short, but that's okay I guess. ...

Hi, Zanna! I really liked your story! I did find a few nitpicks for you, though. sorrow in it’s song It should be 'its' to take it’s journey Again, 'its' ...

Hi That was good, I was intrigued. She sighed, stopped, turned to look up at him. You should put 'and' instead of a comma after 'stopped'. Also you call the ...

Hi I liked the story, but there were a few problems; Karta pulled her trusty pistol out and shot a warning shot. Having 'shot' twice in the same sentence makes ...

Hi Good job writing your story, I liked it. I've just got a few nitpicks for you, though; One of the caves seemed like it was covered with something from ...

Hi This is great! I really enjoyed this piece! I liked Max's unusual hobby. It was funny and you kept the reader drawn in to the very end of the ...

Hi You need to explain a bit more about what's going on. I would also explain a bit more about the characters. She pulled herself up on her to lean ...

Good job, that was interesting! as I watched such naïve human aspirations and passions shine through in the world’s their subconscious’s will me to create. This sentence kinda confused me ...

Hi! I really like this part as well. The way you write it really draws the reader in and keeps them there. I hardly found any errors or problems, great ...

Hi! This was really good! I was very intrigued and it makes me want to read more! I just had one thing that I wasn't so sure about. To me ...

Hi, Good job, I liked this piece of work. I found a few errors; "take place over the Pacific Ocean, eastern Asia and Australia, and western North and South America." ...

Hi, Since your piece was kind of short, I can't help you much, but I did find some errors; “It’s your turn Kirsten, truth, Dare, Donkey dare, Love, kiss, Life?” ...