Tamora

i don't usually enjoy short poems, but this is really powerful, and i like it. the only thing is the second line, I somehow think that's a mistake? but otherwise, ...

Thank you!! I always miss-use semi-colons. I'm so glad that you gave me that site, that's really helped.

Wow!! This has changed so much! I'm not sure if I prefer it this way though, I think you could show the ideas easier when it was more real. Bringing ...

I've been working on this part for ages, but I can't seem to get it right! I want to keep this plot, and all the ideas that asre presented, and ...

I've edited it now, but as I've said there are a few spots that I can't seem to get worked out, so some advice would be very helpful!

Sorry Gladius, I've got to go, I'll review the fourth some other time, from what i saw it looks great! i'll see you later.

Before I read the 4th chapter I'm going to review the third. Sorry I couldn't do this earlier, but it's Christmas, and the family's all here, I just don't have ...

I've checked the punctuation, and changed that sentance, but is there anything that seems to make no sense, or anything that I need to note? :?: :smt059 you guys are ...

I've made more changes, again! the tips are great, keep them coming guys!

I've made the changes that you have suggested. Thanks guys! Yes, Elelel, Brynden likes Lyllan, now calm down! and there's a reason why I used that description of Lyllan. I'm ...

I've edited it to include your ideas. :D Thanks guys, I prefer it as it is now. 8)

This took me ages to write and i'm still new at this, so please review it for me?!

This is just the start, there's more to come.

Keep writing! I'm hooked!

Excellent Prose! Wonderful descriptions of the settings and charactors. It leapt from one thing to another a bit and I found myself confused a bit. If you re write it ...