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That was really good! "It’s still late or maybe it’s really early," that's kind of confusing what does it mean!? when theres a fire in her home, shouldn't she be ...

That was cool! but here “Did you hear? Something’s going on with the Revolutionaries. They think they’ve found the government’s headquarters.” Said Kate with a smile. there should be a ...

I cant wait to read more! but mmaybe you should put quotes here - Everything is going to be okay, I constantly told myself. It had never helped once so ...

I like that you spelled outcast like outKast, its very mysterious and cool looking. You introduced a lot of characters here. All the names are so different and magical. rationalized ...

Is captain kilian hook? maybe you should put what Colm is thinking in italics.“It’s okay boy, you will be needed to run very soon if I play my cards right.” ...

Have you ever watched Once Upon a Time? this sounds a bit like it. Its a great mysterious start to what sounds like a great twist on a great story! ...

Love the ending! “ok, okay I’m sorry. I mean calm down. Or up I guess. Please don’t kill me, we need to talk about this.” there should be a comma ...

That was awesome! You should put a comma here though. "I reckon you couldn't even go one day without using sarcasm, ten euros says you can't even do just that" ...