TakeThatYouFiend

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Thanks, The only reason I called it paradise was to link titles with my other work, "This other Eden, demi paradise. " :-)

Thanks! Take That You Fiend to review your review! :-) You are getting a little mixed with your persons-this is 2nd person; you. I did meen "you are no longer ...

Ahh ok, that's fine then.

Your welcome. :-)

P.S. "Why" should have quotation marks.

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Your wish is my command.

Woof. That was good.

for criticism.

The girl sees the boy-one character see the other. P.S. thanks for not biting my head off.

Thanks! And welcome!

Thanks!

I always find reality and dream mix, thus one could see this as mostly wakening or sleeping. I won't swap the words you suggest because it would break a rhyme ...

Like the fact you wanted your two characters together, so you had one see the other. Coincidence? Then she notices him immediately before the chase. Unlikly. Also the backstory dialogue ...