TakeThatYouFiend

Hey, this is pretty darn good! Firstly, can I just say the rhyming is great. I really like rhyming poetry, and this one is fine, although it is a simple ...

I totally agree that there's allot of unnecessary stigma to gamers, but you didn't cover the health issues: Things like that, with early video games they said in the opening ...

Hello there! Well anyways, this was very nice. Personally I like the rambling bits about senselessness, which is then mirrored to a similar bit on the meaning of poetry. This ...

This worked rather well: The pattern is a very good idea: I like poems with established patterns that emphasize meaning. I do however think there are a couple of tiny ...

Whoo! This combines three of my favorite elements! 1-It rhymes. The rhyme pattern is excellent, particularly considering how difficult it is to get so many lines rhyming with "me." 2-This ...

Hello there MooCow! I am not accustomed to short story reviewing, so I will concentrate on pacing and SPG. On the second sentence of the first paragraph "The" and "shell" ...

Greetings there! Again amazing, the character of the woman assassin was brilliant! I do have a couple of things though: Two things stood out to me as undesirably cliche. The ...

This is strange! Huzzah! First of all let me say you are a brilliant author and this work is amazing. These are not even nitpicks, more just hunches. Anyways methinks ...

That was great, particularly thee beginning, middle and end. The recollection to when you were eight really put the poem in a perspective. In the middle the disinheritance paragraph was ...

Hello there! You have obviously got a wide range of good devices here. To name a few, alliteration, rule of three and varied sentences. So I won't concentrate on them. ...

Hello again! Fancy seeing you here! First of very quickly I shall point out a mistake in punctuation... the minimum length of a ellipsis is three dots yet have a ...

Hello! I love this poem, your boyfriend is evidently a talented poet! There are a couple of things I would suggest, just as an opinion. First the way you change ...

Is this your first truly positive poem? Methinks 'tis. Anyhows, highly enjoyable, I am glad I have so many of your poems to review this fine review day. (Go red.) ...

Hello there oh Purple one! My overall impression was great, this is a brilliant short poem. I have a small piece of minute advice, in my view the fourth line ...

I had read this awhile back, but didn't have time to review. Anyways, a small nitpick. I dislike the ultimate line of the second stanza. It has the power to ...