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Xena, I don't think you really have an open mind at all. This is an AMAZING ABSTRACT! You really need to just let it flow in your mind, not questioning ...

Wow! Very interesting story! I won't do the nit-picks 'cause I'm really not that great at it. But very interesting story! It is full of mystery and great futuristic scifi! ...

I won't do the grammar because it seems to have already been done and I'm not that good at grammar myself... so... 1) Characters James- Is amazing. Good personality. I ...

Hm. Cool idea! This is very interesting! A 'little' problem. haha I don't know where this is set at but around here no one kisses at three haha Okay. Well. ...

Wow, I really loved this! I enjoy writing through the perspective on an inanimate object so it's great for me to read something like this! :) I liked how you ...

I will answer your questions! 1. Did it catch your attention? Very much so! I don't show it alot but I really do like fairy tales and I always wondered ...

This is a very mind spinning story! It could just see this if it was on a screen flashing back a forth (I don't know why...) When I read it ...

I would love to be able to think as freely as this! To be able to dance with statues downtown...if only, if only... This really has emotion in it, I ...

Oh! I haven't read this before now! I really liked it! I don't really see any errors that haven't already been mentioned... Well, there's that part in the end... "Slowly ...

I really like this one! It just seems to be such a real experiance! It's kinda scary when you realize some of these thoughts are thoughts of your own, though... ...

Let's see...all the errors here have already been found so...you know I love this! I know you're continueing so I can't hardly wait for more! Whenever a story is a ...

I really liked it! I do agree with some of the comments already about the childs voice. Children the age of five don't know some of the words you used ...

After I roared (comma not needed) I charged the two half dragons. The shorter one flung himself at me, but I knocked him off to the side and tackled the ...

It looks like most of the grammar problems were found already but I did just want to mention one thing. The first sentence is not a complete sentence so maybe ...

"Cold fear pain. These were all the feelings that rushed through my body as I crashed head first into the sea of daggers. The icy water filled my lungs, as ...