TNCowgirl

HEY!!!! Not fair!!! You can't stop!!!! Ok, so I need to act a little more FAIR!!!!!!! *Cough* Alright, so you MUST keep going. There were only a few mistakes, like ...

Ok, thanks for splitting it up. But don't post all the chapters in one day unless you are getting people that will read them. Now, I didn't expect it to ...

Don't put so many spaces between, but something like ***************************************************************** And don't post everything at once. Big blocks of work hurts the eyes. :D, So if y

WHOA!!! Not what I expected in teh least. The end of it that is. Man, that was intense. Awesome. There were a few times that it looked like there was ...

Good job, I liked it. It moved well and it was very disciptive. It caught my attention which is what you want a prologue to do. You want to catch ...

Wow, an amazing peice. I really liked it. Couldn't figure out why they were trying to take her though. If there is more please keep going. I know this crit ...

I liked it. A lot, the one thing I caught was the "Double AA" Thing, shouldn't it be "Double A" Oh well. Good story, keep going or I"ll stalk you ...

I loved it!!!! I was sad it was just a joke. But it was realistic and very well written. Good job!!!!!!!!!! ***Claps BBB on the back***** I really don't have ...

Mwahahahaha, I get to reply first. This was a really good peace. But on the line. "I love you," The comma needs to be a period. There are two of ...

Alice, I LOVED this one. It was very good. I don't really have any litterary problems that I have seen with it, but this one was really good. I think ...

All right, it was good, though your sentences can flow just a little more then they do. I'm glad Chattanooga is in there. :D Chattagnooga is a pretty cool place. ...

SWEET! Ok, it was really really really really really good. Very discriptive, one thing, if he hit her over the head with a broom stick it would leave a cut, ...

YES! Twas great, you've acctually managed to pull it off sounding very realistic. Surprisingly it acctually sounds like a girl wrote them. Mostly because she has completely started daydreaming about ...

Okay, I think it was great. *And I hate romances, well most romances* Really I just want you to keep going. Is she going to find him? Was it a ...

(This seems a little, strange, the whole little part) A groan came from the cage. “Perosk, that you?” asked Iana to my relief. “How did we get here? I remember ...