SwallowedByInsanity

What do you do to people weaker than you? Kick them when they fall down. How do you get rid of anomalies? Kick them when they fall down. it's a ...

wow. This actually blew me away. It had a very interesting plot, one that I've never seen before really. The 'i don't regret it' part definitely gave it a twist, ...

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This was choppy and messy and you know what.... I loved every bit of it. Don't change a thing, it's brilliant just the way it is. It was told straight ...

Heya (: I'm going to try out a different form of editing today, instead of posting pieces of your poem and then following that up with editing comments, I'm just ...

Everything written from the heart is worth something, remember that! Because it was written in a time of desperation and darkness, it means something and things from the heart can't ...

Hey there! :D insanity here lol. I'd like to start off by letting you know that because you chose such a common topic of poetry, it's very difficult to write ...

Is my imagination the only friend that will love me when I'm gone? I just wanted to mention that since you said 'when i'm gone', you might consider changing 'love' ...

I actually really liked this, and the repetition of "Mitch" worked well (: If I could do things over, Mitch I swear to God I would But time travel's impossible, ...

Wow! Really something worth reading, I could hear the lyrics being sung in my head, they had a real rhythm to them. The doctors, they give me pills, They give ...

I really liked this, I could here the music in my head (I write sheet music as well haha, I'm a pianist) and it was very lovely. I could picture ...

Wow so simple, yet it contains so much feeling in such little words! I've strived for this before and it's something that should be admired when achieved (: Kudos to ...

Circle down from the dark sky of night. "dark sky of night" sounds a little strange. Each flake as beautiful as a springtime flower Maybe, "Equivalent to the beauty of" ...

ooooo! I like this, especially the way it's written like a schedule from day to day. On Tuesday you hovered around close. Gave me a smile. Even said "Hello." Hello ...

This sounds sort of like something a group of kids might chant, like the 'the bears are out tonight' rhyme. I rather liked it really, and it has sort of ...