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Sureal

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Equivalent Worlds - Prologue

    Hi there, ScarlettFire So, I really like your premise. It feels (potentially) refreshing. I hope you manage to realise its potential. I also like the way you write, especially the ...

    Feb 20, 2017
  • Short Story » Supernatural, Horror Re: Two Punched Holes

    Hi Deanie, my name’s Sureal. I’m here to give you a review. Your opening is fantastic (and is actually the entire reason I read this) and the strong writing continues ...

    Jan 21, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Narrative, Mystery / Suspense Re: Young and Wild (Chapter 1)

    Hi, ErikaHale. My name’s Sureal. I’m here to give you a review, which is always a good sign as I don't review stories I find boring. My first thought when ...

    Jan 21, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Secrets Chapter 1

    Hi Remy, I like the way you write. You have a very easy-to-read style that flows nicely. I also see a lot of potential in your writing, so long as ...

    Jan 14, 2016
  • Short Story » General, Mystery / Suspense Re: Day X

    Hi, @abdkirill I enjoyed this. The title attracted me and the story kept me reading throughout. I liked your characterisation and the social-satire running through the piece. Having said that, ...

    Jul 2, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Other Re: Chapter One

    Another strong entry for your novel. (Does the novel have a name, by the way?) Before I try to write up a review of my own, I had a quick ...

    Feb 4, 2014
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: Doppelganger

    Hi there. I like this. It reminds me very much of Edgar Allen Poe's short story 'William Wilson.' ( If you're interested, here's a link to its Wikipedia page , ...

    Feb 1, 2014
  • Short Story » General, General Re: totally random but...

    I think this might be a missed opportunity to really go crazy and experiment with your writing. Rather than just saying 'I can't sleep' and 'ADD sucks,' you could have ...

    Jan 30, 2014
  • Article / Essay » Literature, Spiritual Re: The Christian Defense

    In terms of framing an argument (or 'proof' as you put in), I think your main weakness is in your final point, re. the resurrection. And as your argument that ...

    Jan 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Other Re: Prologue

    This is really good, so I'm going to have to go with a nit-picky review. I hope you don't mind. -> "shaded by the blanket which hid the rest of ...

    Jan 28, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Other Re: Why I believe in God.

    I don't normally review poetry as it's not really my thing; I'm much more a prose guy. However, with all the controversy and strong feelings this is causing, I'm going ...

    Jan 27, 2014
  • Short Story » Spiritual, General Re: I'm not ready

    Just throwing a few opinions your way: -> This reads like something I would have written. In fact, the first half is almost moment-for-moment identical to a story I wrote ...

    Jan 27, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Dragon in my Dreams

    Hi there, Bol. Just dropping by to drop some opinions. -> I'm going to have to disagree with the other reviewers so far, and say I wasn't a massive fan ...

    Jan 25, 2014
  • Short Story » General, Literature Re: 1

    Thoughts: -> The fragmented writing style works well. Makes the story immediately stand out, and mirrors the fragmented mind of the character. -> Watch out for cliched phrases. 'Hung lazily ...

    Dec 18, 2013
  • Short Story » Humor, Action / Adventure Re: Benny and Edword's big adventure.

    Hi there McSlothington! Always good to see someone getting into humour writing. It's a difficult genre to get right, but a very satisfying one to write when you do manage ...

    Dec 18, 2013


A beautiful funeral doesn't guarantee Heaven.
— Haitian Proverb