Sunshine

Rude, rude, rude. Leaving us of like that. When I started reading this I thought you'd tie up the lose ends but you made more! Love the book, think ya ...

Hey cool idea! I liked the context you put this in. I think you started off a bit abrupt. This is ok if you go back later in the story ...

I was going and prepared to say something bad, but i can't. Honestly Pointe I don't think your gonna get many harsh reviews. The flow was good and the subject ...

You need help finishing this? I can't tell you what to do but... I'd do something with maybe animal life or plants. So gentle leafs curve, Across a sweet green ...

Ok I'm no good at saying bad things or making spelling corrections but hey, you wanted comments! I liked this piece. I got alot of what your saying. The flow ...

Hey foxy! This is well written but I'm not sure where your going with it. Foxy wrote: That was not long before Mr. Hoper’s five-year-old daughter Emily ran out looking ...

Uh... WOW. Very dramatic. I'm not a nit-picker ( That sounded weird) but here's what I have to say: - The flow was a bit off to me. I can't ...

Good job Pink!!!!!! (SO glad this just got posted) I'm a newbie fan to your book! Honestly, I can't find anything wrong. I think this held alot of mystery and ...

Well ,since kiki just STOLE the biggest part I had to say here's my opinion: -Kiki is right LISTEN TO HER!! -Subsitute some of the periods for commas to help ...

It's a good and creative story but very vague. I hope you'll write more! Alzora and LiveLaugh are right. Very twilite like. Was that your inspiration? AWESOME END SENTANCE. Very ...

Interesting piece. Please add like a little charecter script at the beggining. I think that would be very helpful. also a bit more realistic. ( As in if people were ...

This story seems a bit cluttered to me. I mean that you needed a bit more space. Deelish wrote: Madam Matilda's Orphanage. Cold-hearted Madam Matilda would always remind Tally of ...

This is good! :) I don't know much about limericks but this made me smile. Tenyo nitpicked the only mistakes I could find so... Keep a writin'! P.S. How'd you ...

WELCOME TO OUR LITTLE WRITERS CORNER!!!! Honestly I wasn't going to review this piece ( long pieces can be hard to review) but ya' got me at the first sentance! ...

:):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):) Hehe. I'm an in bewtweener but that was still really funny! I think everyone was to busy laughing to tell exactly when 'Edward" came in. Could you clear th