Published October 9, 2010
Much can be partained by pictures,
Therefore I try to paint a picture with words,
With colors and feelings and smells and sights.
But you cannot trust in me, trust your imagination for the thrill...
Yellow, Red, Orange swirls of color pop,
Cool wind lashes my face and body,
Soon rain drenches me head to toe,
But I must push for there is a path I must take to finish my journy.
I jump and land among the stars for a peaceful rest,
But I know I must leave soon,
I come down and continue on my way yet with happiness,
But I must push for there is a path I must take to finish my journy.
When I come to a cliff I must jump,
And pray to the Lord of wings,
I make it across only to have the harsh smiles of twisted trees greet me,
But I must push for there is a path I must take to finish my journy.
And when I can run no more,
My lungs burst and head twirls with the sights I've seen,
Although I've come this far, I know it is only half of what I must endure,
But I must push for there is a path I must take to finish my journy.
And when I have completed my course of life,
I slide in to greet death with a smile at the last moment,
For I have seen the world and taken it's ups and downs first hand,
Now I am satisfied for I have come to my destination, a calm, eternal rest in the loving palm of God...
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Thank you. I must admit, It's a bit rough around the edges, yet that can be fixed.
WOW! This is an amazing poem (seriously, take this as a huge compliment; I don't usually rave about poems like this). You have such a deep insight to a wonderful perspective on how to experience a life on earth. Not only have you been successful in perfecting your poem in terms of communicating ideas whilst remaining interesting but you have also written something that I have read nothing like before which is an achievement in itself. Extremely well done and hope to read more of your work soon
-Blossom xx
Uh... WOW. Very dramatic. I'm not a nit-picker ( That sounded weird) but here's what I have to say:
- The flow was a bit off to me. I can't put my fingure on it so try to ask someone more experienced.
Honestly the poem was really pretty and sweet. Good work!:)