Summerless

First the critiques and then the compliments. I bounded into the kitchen the next morning, feebly hoping that the photo studio, the new tattoo, and the kiss had been all ...

I think this poem is too short to have much meaning. Yes, there are some really short poems like haikus, but this one doesn't really have any poetic elements. It ...

I really liked this poem. The rhythm; your rhythm. I loved the repetition in that line, [quote]Before people brought strudel and stew [/quote and I loved the alliteration in this ...

Wow. Extremely informative and a little haunting (about Joseph Mengele and other examples included). I can tell you did a lot of research, and if you didn't it sounds like ...

The title drew me in so points for that. :] Just a few small things. Mediocre in existence , Trading Truth for hearts of ice , They are blind to ...

Try spacing it out more so it's easier to read. Great dialogue for the mom and the narrator---I can see the characterization so vividly. I agree with GryphonFledgling, though. Try ...

Aww, I love the ending! The line breaks in the end really added to the relaxed tone. There's only one mistake I caught. I breath in savoring the scent that ...

This is a beautiful poem. Love the title, too. Each stanza flows well into the next. One thing, though. The last line, You're finally free seems a little weak after ...

This was touching. I've never went to a soup kitchen before but your poem sent me there so I was watching everything happened as I read your entry. Strong word ...

They slowly grew louder and louder. The man could barely breathe. The closet door swung open. Oh the suspense! What a perfect cliffhanger. I only found one error. He could ...

Oh wow, I love the last stanza! It sounds powerful because you repeated "I need you to leave me be" twice. One thing, though. Why can't you just , open ...

I like how you used the River of Styx and Charon in your poem. Two things, though. I would put a punctuation mark after "the bloom," such as a comma. ...

I thought this sounded fine. The lines didn't sound scattered and I like how you ended with the title. I like how you used "materialistic" and "ransacked"---they bring out the ...

Oh wow, I REALLY love the repetition you used. At first I thought you were always repeating line two of each stanza on purpose (with the exception of the last ...

This is unique. I love how you incorporated words like "leggero" and "pianissimo" and "forte" into the poem--it truly makes it sound more beautiful. Also, I like how you brought ...