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Re: away
Very well written but lacking context and body.
Dec 14, 2017 -
Re: buried things
This is good.
Dec 11, 2017 -
Re: i am the fragile china plate lion (no, you aren't)
Great! Those are some very profound messages. However, your writing does not reflect what you say above. If you could find a way of distinguishing between those three points and ...
Dec 3, 2017 -
Re: i am the fragile china plate lion (no, you aren't)
People are the monsters in this life. They will hurt those that are stronger than them, no matter how much it may hurt the person. Those people are the demons, ...
Dec 2, 2017 -
Re: Mercy.
Concise and to the point! However, the poem is quite vague. Perhaps some symbolism could help!
Dec 1, 2017 -
Re: i am the fragile china plate lion (no, you aren't)
Hi. I believe it would be a great improvement if you were to reread this piece and edit it. A lot of it is redundant. Also, I find that replacing ...
Dec 1, 2017 -
Re: "Let it Load"
hur hur
Oct 21, 2017 -
Re: My Best Friend is Gay.
Bought to you by YWS spaghetti code
Oct 17, 2017 -
Re: Oh, Becky: an application of philosophy to teenage problems
I'm sorry if this comes off as rude but this is quite sincere. I firmly believe everything I state in the comment above and this is the way I found ...
May 16, 2017 -
Re: Oh, Becky: an application of philosophy to teenage problems
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May 15, 2017 -
Re: Mind
Nice.
Apr 28, 2017 -
Re: When Doing Nothing is Doing Everything
HI. I agree with everything Lumi said because he is Lumi. Also some formatting wouldn't hurt. The material is excellent but spacing it out or just capitalizing would make it ...
Apr 28, 2017 -
Re: Nine Billion
Good
Apr 23, 2017 -
Re: for Rachel.
This gets a like. Keep writing.
Feb 20, 2017 -
Re: I Can't Even
Pretty spicy bud.
Feb 15, 2017