Okay.
I am proving myself a liar for you, but I want to round off everything properly because you need to understand why this took time.
Stanza three is your weakest in flow, content, execution--all aspects that I analyze critically for proper edits. This wasn't an immediate decision because the smoothness and fluidity and heartfelt content of stanzas one and particularly two set up a momentum that masked it initially.
But the entire piece is a letter on the person deserving love in whatever form it takes, and that's a beautiful thing. It's a universal thing. For that reason, if this is published, those who need to feel the sentiments here will take things away that you couldn't put on a page. That's why I loved it so much, Pass. I hope you can understand that. Inferential Potential is the greatest thing a poem could ever showcase.
If you choose to edit, spend some time with stanza three. It wants your love.
All the best,
Ty
Points: 1626
Reviews: 745
Donate