StoryWeaver13

Life begins with no sight, no recollection of things past. Eyes open, and in slips Colors! Beauty! Textures! Hmm...not sure I like this part... (Along with the covert flimsiness of ...

To me this seems more like a condensed story, forced into an off-beat rhyme rather than a true poem. I mean, technically speaking it is, but you do too much ...

The hard part of a short poem like this is that you have to make that impact fast, which luckily you did. I really like the idea behind this, and ...

I LOVE the whole idea behind this, and for the most part it's really creative and open and emotional, which is good. The only part that really bothered me was ...

Hey there. :) Anyway, I think this is too weighed down by your rhyme scheme. A poem doesn't really need a rhyme to be a poem, it just needs a ...

I think this has the potential to really get somewhere, my only thing is (and I think the first reviewer mentioned this) that you say they were all murdered the ...

Navita was spot-on with her review - "a seamless poem with tumbling imagery" (wow, I love that). It was wild and free and mind-boggling all at the same time, and ...

Wow, this is really something. The more I read, the more and more I was sucked in to all of it, wondering what twists and turns were coming up next. ...

Hey there. Well, this was good. We got a nice glimpse of who the characters are for the most part, although I feel like we still don't know all that ...

Well I like it. I think it might benefit from a little more punctuation but that's just me. The imagery and such are a little overworked, but are also well-done ...

Hey there. OK, so this was a decent poem, but there were a couple of things that just bugged me a little. You're pretty consistent with your rhyme scheme until ...

Cool, I like the whole un-poetry idea and how you kind of choose to toss the rules out the window. It feels really fun and free. Because of the style ...

I thought this was really honest and well-written, and while there was little action it managed to keep my interest. Your grammar's fine, your spelling, etc., and overall I just ...

I'm not familiar with the style, so sorry for that, but it is a good poem. I really like the whole theme in general, and I think it was a ...

Hey, I really liked the last poem you wrote, so I thought I might check out another! This is cool, it feels really loose and free and unpolished, but in ...