StoryWeaver13

This is pretty good, although I've never been a huge fan of depressing poetry in majority just because there's so much of it. But still, it was a solid piece, ...

Let me first point out that I hate romances...but so far love this. The things I like: The basic plot seems really interesting so far. At first when it started ...

Your first poem? No way! My first poem sounded more like Dr. Seuss than Shakespere... But really, I'm impressed, I wasn't expecting so much. The writer before me gave you ...

Well it isn't a bad poem, the problem is that the rhymes are just too common and typical; it was almost as if I knew exactly what lines would procede ...

First, the technical stuff... I struggle to breath e , (You make this mistake one other time too). Now, as for the topic at-hand, this is a touchy subject and ...

Oh, no, not another vampire story!!! But in all honesty, I couldn't stop reading. I was really hooked into your story, and intrigued by your characters, as well as your ...

I like this, it seems really emotional and honest, and the lack of rhyme scheme and intricate wording made it seem even more personal. This being as short as it ...

Okay, so the first part kind of jumps the gun and the character rushes straight into panic-mode. This could just be your character, but it seemed a little irrational, even ...

You make a mistake that a lot of people make - you do too much telling, describing and explaining. You keep us held up on unnecessary and sometimes irrelevant detail. ...

This poem was littered with overworked cliche and metaphor. That being said, there's something I like about the imagery of comparing someone you've lost to a dead rose. My personal ...

Overall I thought this was good; there was something about it very...delicate about it that gave it a sense of innocence and purity. My main problem lies in this line: ...

Cute, funny, I like it all...EXCEPT the last line. That's just where it kind of turns commercial; suddenly I picture this on one of those cheesy TV ads or something. ...

This poem's OK for the most main problem is with the last stanza where you really lose hold of the rhyme scheme (which seems a little shaky and overly sing-songy ...

I didn't expect to be so wrapped up in this story, but it was almost as if I'd become melded into it, a witness that walked the halls and lived ...

Well I thought this was pretty cute. Not really much to say, just...cute. :D My only real problem with it is that there were times it seemed to kind of ...