StoryWeaver13

This surprised me. I hadn't expected the direction this took at all! Ha ha, I do this in math class too, I swear it's an STD (story-transmitted-disease). But, naturally, your ...

Well as far as first poems go this isn't bad at all. And you tackled a difficult subject matter - yes, everyone can write about love, but that's exactly the ...

I definitely thought that this was interesting, and truly I have no criticisms. You manage to make this flow pretty well for such a loosely-formatted poem, and I like that ...

‘My name is Antonio Khan. I live in London. I have a hot girlfriend and a cool best friend. That’s all that you really need to know about me.’ Ha ...

Aww, this is sweet. I'm really close with my dad, so this related to me in a strange sort of backwards way, and I'm sure a lot of other people ...

This was nice, but I felt like it could've had more imagery so we could really delve in on what you were feeling. I suppose it felt a little too ...

Why howdy, I do believe I just reviewed another poem of yours! Well I definitely noticed some similarities between the two syntax-wise, but I like this one much, much better. ...

Okay, so I kinda like the concept here. My one problem was that you really didn't find a way to tie this all together. And I think that once it ...

Right before writing my review I looked at the one creativityrules gave, and she is so right. YWS is amazing for turning yourself from "just another writer" to gaining your ...

I know how this feels, and I think this captured the kind of sad and heart-sore emotion that goes along with missing someone you can't see. I wasn't crazy about ...

Hello there. :D Well, I have some issues with the prologue. It's just too....blunt, in my opinion. Opening up fictional creatures to a novel can be difficult, especially in first ...

This really struck a chord with me, since I had a childhood stroke and basically had to go through a series of "recovery" sessions and, similar to you, the whole ...

Sometimes, you need comfort. Sometimes you need to be alone. When someone special dies, you don't know what you need. Sometimes, you feel like you need both at once. Now, ...

I peer down at the girl in the green coat and openly criticize her in my mind. How are you openly criticizing if it's in your mind? She's taken several ...

This is pretty good, but it's a bit of a run-on. Try breaking these sentences down a bit with commas or by switching them up and you'll have a better ...