StoryWeaver13

This is a good start, but it definitely needs polishing up and additional details. It also feels as though we were thrown straight into the mix of what's going on; ...

Hey, Formslipper! I really like this...the style, off-beat personality and rhyme scheme, all of it. My one problem is that I would probably suggest using a little bit more punctuation. ...

This is reaaallllyyyyy compelling, I just want to keep reading! And I will. ;) So, if I forget, feel free to message me once you've got more chapters up and ...

This is just....amazing. Stellar. You probably don't need anymore compliments, but I'll tell you you deserve them. This is so clever and beautiful, and the story weaves perfectly. Your last ...

It's cool hearing a guy's perspective, because it's always about the bride in a way, and I agree, totally not fair. It's not the bride's day, it's the couple's day. ...

Originality has been resurrected! Seriously. This was really good! I love this line: Post-originality sounds demeaning, It just sounds sad And the last line, too, of course, was brilliant. I ...

You you's a lot of you's, don't you? Haha, okay, I know my second "you" shouldn't even be one, but you get the idea. A bunch of "you's." The other ...

This was a really, really strong article! Definitely understandable. This was pretty concise, but managed to say all that it need ed to in the process. I wish I had ...

Wow, I can totally relate (my little brother's autistic, younger sister potentially suicidal). I think that, despite the fact that in reality your MC is complaining, she does it in ...

There's something really mysteriously compelling about this poem. I like the way you intertwine the ideas, and really my one critical thought here is just that it doesn't flow *quite* ...

Thanks! Really? Whenever I don't capitalize I get a million comments from people saying I should!n Just thought I'd chime in; it's a personal preference. You get a lot of ...

I really like this (and definitely relate). My only problem with this is the fact that you repeat "You've done something different with your hair." It's not particularly impacting and ...

Yo Mikko! Wow, just...wow. XD I really really like this. The one tiny problem I have with this is the repetition of "she's got," I've never really been a fan ...

I looove that Disney song! But you know, your version's pretty stellar too. Definitely cute, I love doing stuff like this and it's always interesting to see what people come ...

I don't find this childish. I love it. : ) Really, there's a childlike aspect to it, but that's what makes it mesmerizingly beautiful. Your characters are interesting and have ...