StoneHeart

Okay, so stories about uncontrollabe emo's really have a way of turning my day in on itself. However, this was interesting. I really don't feel pity for emotional people who ...

Okay! So here I am with a review for ya! Okay, so I'm looking at this and thinking . . . it really isn't that good. Don't be put down, ...

Okay, this really seems great. BUT! It does have a couple problems, first, I can't really till if 'I' is a girl or a boy, I'll assume a girl because ...

Hrm, okay for my review. Well . . . there ain't much thar?! I do admit, I find it rather hard to get my cat off of my lap. Though ...

Hey! Black here for a review. First off, WELCOME TO YWS! I hope you like it - if you have ANY questions, message me. Back to your story. Okay, so ...

Ahhhh . . . one of these spy/special agent stories. They're really great! Oaky, this really was a great intro, with just the kind of drop off and start that ...

Black here for a review. Okay, first off, this was great! But, I'd advise you to take it out of this paragraph form and turn it into a really, really ...

Okay, another good chapter, though rather depressing. I like to end a chapter with a bit of hope, though, granted, I don't always. Ah, again, your world, it needs work, ...

Wow, again, I must say, I love your world. It's unique, and interesting, it makes me want to read more and more and more. I like it how you put ...

Ohhhkay! First off, this was awesome, your grammar is very, very, very nice, but your spelling is lacking. Remember, you're writing a book, not texting, you can't use stuff link ...

Okay, waaaaay too much info on ages. Was Seth actually nine when he got a job at a lab? I can't think of anything very pleasant a nine year old ...

Okay, this is a first draft, so I'll give you some slack. I do however deeply advise you to go and carefully review this, weeding out all of the little ...

Wow, this must be my biggest review ever! Enjoy. I promise it's like shall not be surpassed in all of my reviewing days! Okay, here’s a review. You’ve been really ...

Okay, I read the first chapter of this story a little while ago and believe I commented on it . . . Again, good work. This was an impressive story, ...

First off : Welcome to YoungWritersSociety. :) Black here for a review. I think the name should be "Nephalem" with a capital N. :) Your paragraphs are well written, though ...