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Re: Little Sister chapter 1 EDITED
I'm going to have faith that you can take care of your own typos :) Generally it's best to put your flashbacks in italics and not separate them with your ...
Jan 11, 2015 -
Re: Tales of a Tabaxi, Prologue: Arrival
Okay, hey Swiftur; Black here for a quick review! First thing that really caught my eye about this piece is some exceptionally nice grammar and punctuation! I like it very ...
Jun 4, 2014 -
Re: The Blood Bath and Favorable Odds
Hey Grav, Black here for a quick bit of feedback on your entry. Okay, so far, so good. As usual I won't be pouring nit picks and grammar corrections in ...
Jun 3, 2014 -
Re: Hunger Games Entry
Okay Shady, review incoming! Allright: Quick pre-review comment. This is going to be pure information and opinion, so mind if it's messy and insulting. If you disagree with what I ...
Jun 2, 2014 -
Re: Hunger Games Entry
Okay Shady, review incoming! Allright: Quick pre-review comment. This is going to be pure information and opinion, so mind if it's messy and insulting. If you disagree with what I ...
Jun 2, 2014 -
Re: Prologue of The Token (please review! I plan on publishing it. See other chapters as well)
Hey Stormcrow, Black here for a review. Mind if this is a bit long, but read it carefully and take it from a fellow novelist. Please. Okay. I'm really liking ...
Jun 1, 2014 -
Re: Gather Me Flowers (Avari's Song)
Hmh. Well, this is hardly going to pass as a review; but here goes. First: Interesting subject (very out-of-way for YWS). I must say I haven't run into any songs ...
Apr 16, 2014 -
Re: The Cat's Joy
. . . Hey Wolf, saw this here posted in the team forum, so I thought I'd drop by and give you a bit of feedback. So, Black here to ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: The Tales of the Argonauts: The Osorezu and the Hana (Chapter 3-2)
Hey Ulala (Nice name btw), Black here to drop in some minor pieces of feedback. Seeing as I have to get off of this computer here, this is just gonna ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: Golden Bird, Red Fox: Chapter seven
Hey, uh, buggie; black here for a review. Ohkay, generally I don't put much stock in "AWESOME JOB", "GOOD WORK, LOVED IT!" type sentences, I have to say that this ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: Sorceress: Chapter 6
Hey Aurora! Black here for a few pieces of review input. So! Though I AM starting this story a bit far along, I can tell that you have a plot ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: The Mark that You Made. - Prologue.
Hey Shea. I've gotta say, that's a very interesting way to write a journal -generally I just record events and feelings in mine. It actually sounds quite personal, and a ...
Feb 2, 2014 -
Re: The Fallen-Book the First-Chapter One
. . . Hey AE, Black here for some feedback -If you're interested. Now, before I post this I wanna tell you that I'm not out to attack you > ...
Feb 1, 2014 -
Re: Guardianship Ch.1: The Girl Who Held Darkness
Interesting story world you have here. Might I give you a couple hints. 1. Words aren't always spelled the way the sownd. 2. 'The Darkness Wielding Girl' grammatically incorrect (and ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: What if the World fell to Robots? (W.W.R.) Chapter 2: Why must this happen to us all?
Hey Green! Wicked looking story you've got here. I have to admit, I'm impressed. You've got a really interesting lookin' story world, with a great prospect for a good plot. ...
Dec 29, 2013