Hmh. Well, this is hardly going to pass as a review; but here goes.
First: Interesting subject (very out-of-way for YWS). I must say I haven't run into any songs that used this particular clip style on a subject like this. But it's really well done. When reading it I can 'hear' the flow come together naturally; I don't have to think about it. That's really really neat. Your use of things like "myst'ry" is really well done when read out properly. I can definitely see why you're proud of it.
One tiny tiny thing. I'm not sure that that last comma you use is totally appropriate. Just read through it a couple times; I'm probably just being an idiot, but you might'z well look into it.
I really enjoyed this piece -seriously; I don't mean to sound all soft and mushy over it, but this was incredibly done. Spectacular. Laure' down here's enthusiasm is NOT unwaranted.
It's rather short though, isn't it . . . for a song?
Anyway. Keep writing.
Enjoyed muchly.
(~Black~)
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