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@Ysayle Please stick solely to reviewing the poem (it's a good review by the way) and offering suggestions to the author. Saying that the author should 'invest in some empathy' ...

Yea the assumption I made was thinking that the group she's in is some kind of cult, and that what happened here was related to being in said secretive cult. ...

Then you need to give more indicators that he doesn't 'swing that way', because what you have now doesn't scream that.

Oh I didn't know the MC was a guy. You probably need them to be doing more 'guy' stuff like playing video games, sports etc.

Hey there. So normally I would be reviewing things, but I love your poem so much that I'm gonna spend this time to give you kudos instead :) It's a ...

You might actually want to read the entire review, coz I didn't necessarily say that a submissive character is bad per se, but I did bring up some other issues ...

Glass can be vague, but she needs to give away info that would concern them in some way, either in a form of a threat or some revelation of their ...

I'll talk to you later about it. Kinda busy pondering over an assignment question atm.

Hey there. So yea, first of all, you should consider paragraphing to make your ideas more clear and organized. Each new paragraph should talk about a different idea. Right now ...

Hey there. So a lot has been said about this prologue, and I have to say that I'm curious as to what's happening. I'm going to add a few more ...

Hello again XxBrokenVainxX. I admit that I had assumed that your preference as a prologue. This is because of all the time that I've been a member on this site ...

Hey there Penguin, as I promised. His awakening seemed to have a ripple effect, for he soon heard footsteps coming into the room. Please do not try to make your ...

Hey again cherylkate. I would like to first point out that I did also read the first part when I was doing the critique so that I knew what I ...

Hey there googly. Once the last bell rang I was at my car, pulling out my keys immediately. What bell are we talking about here? Be more specific. I didn't ...

Yes JC, that would make her sacking much more realistic. I had some sort of feeling that Charlie seems to be more of the active type than being stuck in ...