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Hey there, He stood on the peak and looked into a vial of purple liquid. He drank it. He threw up and out of the vomit came his mother and ...

Hey there LAF, She struggled in her tight, leather skirt that barely passed her butt, and almost tripped her tall black boots. "Butt" seems quite informal for what is being ...

Hey Ayra :D Well I did promise that I'm going to be harsher on you. Let's start this trend with this piece shall we? The silence is almost tangible. I ...

Okay i understand all of what you saying i've said this once before i dont want to give away everything in the first chapter i wanna leave some mystery with ...

Hey there mintantlers, and welcome to YWS. “They’re gaining on us! Coystar, get us out of here!” she hissed. Not very original for dialogue in my opinion. The cat alien ...

Hey there wildnaturespirit, and welcome to YWS. ( I have not seen you before so yeah.) Sunlight was pouring into the room. You might want to expand on the showing ...

Hey there Midori, and welcome to YWS. "She can't hear you Seth." Said the voice of a woman unseen, that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere. The full stop ...

Hey Syd, I’ve always felt a strong vibe inside of me when I knew he was around, a type of lurching in my stomach and I feel my blood begin ...

Hey there Falcon_Ablaze, and welcome to YWS :D . A dark, sullen being with seal brown hair and piercingly clear blue eyes was just barely distinguishable sitting on a mahogany ...

Hey there Azlia, My bubble of idle thought is burst as the electric school bell rings, sharp and metallic like an alarm clock. The rustle of papers and the squeak ...

Hey there blurstarr9009, and welcome to YWS ^^ In a land before time, where mountains are still young, in three different times, heroes will meet. They will cross vast expanses ...

Hey Errant, Entering the quiet town lined with nice cottages and brick walkways, people waved to Victoria and always said, “Good day.” or “So nice to see you again, Lady ...

Hey there Onceuponatim3xo, The old photo showed a child cradled in his mother’s arms. The mother smiled widely as the baby slept. The next showed another infant in her father’s ...

Hey Rubric, Syd is right, I'm back XD Just asking, is this an individual chapter or is it just a part of your novel? His fine armour proved useless as, ...

Hey there Audy, I won't do a line to line, as I don't think you need one. Firstly, I think you had too many descriptions. It's nice that you have ...