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Re: The Crystal Chronicles: Sapphire
Hey there kiwiauthor_13. Remember me? I was the guy that PM'ed you lol. Ever since “IT” happened, I have purposely separated myself from all other human contact, physical or verbal. ...
Dec 11, 2008 -
Re: Innocently Guilty
Hey Kaylyn. Branches whipped her face, arms, and legs as she ran blindly. The woods were a blur of greens, browns, and blacks. Are you able to integrate these two ...
Dec 11, 2008 -
Re: Figment II
Hey there cherylkate, and welcome to YWS. Naughty girl for trying to flunk your semester :wink: What little air there is between us is warm but not stifling – the ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: Unspoken Words - Chapter one
Hey there googly. Once the last bell rang I was at my car, pulling out my keys immediately. What bell are we talking about here? Be more specific. I didn't ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: Rachel
Hey there KailaMarie. Rachel was adorable. She was the cutest girl I'd ever seen in my entire life. Can you provide an example where Rachel was cute or adorable? We ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: Untitled - Ch.1 Part Two
Hey Vivi. Silver rain slunk icily down the foggy square windows of the bus. Both Marshel and I new that this was not my stop, but he new I was ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: Glass eyes and Ghosts
Hey again archer123. Anna sat teary eyed and starred out at the flat landscape. Her grandfather had died and depression hit her like a hammer. These two ideas should link ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: Lonely Bones
Hey Pingu, what's up? How have you been lately? When I first read this poem, I had mixed feelings about it. I think I had somewhat enjoyed it, but didn't ...
Dec 9, 2008 -
Re: please delete
Hello vox nihili. The bitter wind was edged in ice, stinging like the talons of a raptor; the slate stratus clouds an omen of the torrents that would soon slice ...
Dec 9, 2008 -
Re: The Zipper of Your Pants part 3
Hehe. Your turn Chey. I tore my eyes off the steaming platters of food, smiling nervously at the woman dishing. Woman dishing? I glanced at Sara nervously, to see her ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: The Faded- Prologue
Hello turity, and welcome to YWS. It was strange falling asleep after eighteen years of sleepless nights. I find eighteen years of no sleep to be highly unrealistic. A person ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Killing Butterflies: a tragedy [2]
Hey JC, I'm back to review chapter 1. The familiar atmosphere didn’t help my mood; instead it reminded me that John was normally here too, with his arm around me ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: [deleted]
Hehe. Hey Castles. That was the thought that echoed through her head as she stood upon the hilltop, the dry-gold grass whispering against her calves as she looked out to ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Prologue of my story
Hey there Haruno Sakura. You shouldn't be so nervous when posting works on the site. People are trying to help you out to improve your writing abilities. You will not ...
Dec 7, 2008 -
Re: The Guardian
Hey there Ha6647, and welcome to YWS. From behind the moving creature a loud crack echoed through the forest depths, the sound could have been mistaken for a peal of ...
Dec 7, 2008
