Sportgurl46

hey :) i have to say, out of all the poems i have read on YWS this is one of the better ones :) i have only a few suggestions ...

this poem is really great :) i like what you are trying to say here :) the beginning: A choice must be made, a decision given. Do I jump or ...

hey :) this poem is really good :) the only thing i have to say is that at this part Not the pain of death, nor the pain of loss, ...

great poem :) i like what you are saying.that kinda sounds mean...but i just like the poem :) ok, just a couple things: 1) typo- How could i? the i ...

hey :) i really like this poem :) it may have started out happy, but i like the way it ended up :) just a few suggestions for you: first, ...

ok, first i would like to say great poem :) just a couple suggestions. you run your hands along my back, I smile, you smile back, I feel a tingle ...

hey :) great poem :) i am glad that you put all your anger into this poem instead of putting it into revenge against him. A couple things: 1) Stanzas-stanzas ...

this was great :) i love how it has so much fun and inocence in it :) it makes me want to be little again :) the only thing i ...

there are so many meanings in this poem, and that is what makes it good. i hear your voice throughout the poem, and i love what it is saying. you ...

ok, I agree with timjim77(thought I would throw that out there). This part slows the poem down Oh flower, you know. I didn't really understand how that fit into the ...

Do you realize what you have just done for every person that reads this post? You have just opened that persons eyes to what is really important in life. You ...

I love how you thought so much of your neighbor to write a poem about him. This peom was so amazing and insightful. You two must be close and I ...

This poem was intense. I haven't read anything like it before and I thought that it was very good and I think that you are such an incredible writter. I ...

wow. you really know how to show people what is going on. It is so easy to get lost inside the little world that you are creating while you write ...

ok, things I liked: You don'tt exactly read a lot of poems about the sun It was very well descripted and you show very well Things I didn't like: I ...