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Re: Game On (Level 2)
Hey gamergirl. I'm SporkPunk and I'll be reviewing this. :] Now, I'm going to go through this and correct errors as I see them and then expound on my corrections ...
Aug 20, 2011 -
Re: Want It
Hey there preachergirl! I'm SporkPunk and I'll be reviewing this today. :] So, first off, I thought the idea was quite good but I think it could be executed a ...
Aug 20, 2011 -
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Hi there, Jace! I'm SporkPunk, and I'll be reviewing this today. I haven't read your other chapter, but after reading this I want to. :) Technical Stuff She inadvertedly played ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: I See Myself
Hi Delanie! I'm Sporks, and I'll be reviewing this today. This time, I will go line-by-line to address anything I see that might need...improvement. :) WHEN I LOOK AT MYSELF ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: Poseidon
Hiya, Meg! :D Here as requested for a review. And thanks for reviewing my chapter. :] It was really helpful. Anyway, onto your review! I had felt the need to ...
Mar 21, 2011 -
Re: The Ancients- Starting..
Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I'm Sporks and I'll be reviewing this today. Paradise beneath the heavens- The Ancient Memory: The Lord’s son, Zevro had discovered the perfect world where ...
Mar 20, 2011 -
Re: Patience chapter 1
Hey Sarah, Sporks here as requested!:) I'll point out anything as I go along. Walking to technology seemed longer today, was it because I was thinking of him? His liquid ...
Mar 5, 2011 -
Re: The Masquerader Chap. 5
Hey there, Megsug! Thanks for requesting a review. I apologize for not getting to it more quickly, I had some projects to do the past few days. But I'm here ...
Mar 3, 2011 -
Re: Hot Rod II
Hiya, Wolfman! I kind of sort of love your username. Anyway, on to the review. First, I really liked this. I haven't read the first part (there is one, right? ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: Track marks
Hey there, Retro! :] Random red runs are scattered across my arm. Some see it as a cry of help, or for attention. I was looking for escape. Ah, a ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: Essential
Hi there! :D I think this is a pretty great poem. I really liked it a lot. My only nitpick is the line "clean my boots will be." It doesn't ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: The Waiting Room
Hey there :D This was really, really ambitious. Second person, prose-y poem style, and interesting subject matter. While I admire how you tackle all of these things, I don't know ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: Imagine
Hey there Be! :P I must say, overall, I like this poem. It's cute, sweet, simple. However, I have one nitpick. "They're pinky promises." ...I don't know about other readers, ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: Where Are You?
Hi Hayden! Sporks here to review. To be honest, I'm not going to pretend to be a poetry expert, but I kind of liked the repetition used here. It kind ...
Feb 27, 2011 -
Re: Acceptance
Hey there! Sporks dropping by to review. The machines she’s wired to scream her departure. This is awkward. Maybe change up the wording? ten-oh-seven pm, Generally, times are best as ...
Feb 27, 2011
