SpiritedWolfe

Hello there. Welcome to YWS~ Alright, start off by saying that I like how you really took the perspective of the Indians (Native Americans?) here and that you really encoporated ...

Hello, Noelle! I'm going to just jump right into the thick of things here. Which really, it might... Professor Riggs might actually kill me. Right off the bat, this is ...

Hey, Noelle~ I've got to start this off with a nitpick - He was running at a very fast pace, one that she couldn’t keep up with. Two sentences in ...

Hey, Dark Raven! So, I finally became smart and looked up just a little bit of background info about Kick-Ass and what happened in some of the comics, and it ...

Hey, Dark Raven! I must say, that you have an interesting vocabulary, and not in the bad way. I've actually learned about quite a few words from reading your works, ...

Hello there! This first little thing I'm pulling out is a small issue, but I've seen it before and it sure happened somewhere else in this chapter ~ Clothes, not ...

Hello again! Oh, I was just thinking last chapter where in the world Doctor Paul went, but my questions have been answered! I replaced her acceptance of violence with a ...

Hello there! So we're finally back to seeing Mandy? Awesome! I loved looking into her perspective, because it all seemed so innocent and just lost. She's trying so very hard ...

Hey, Dark Raven. I was surprised that she hadn’t asked to sleep in with me or my dad But she so will xD It's kind of a nice touch here, ...

Hey, Dark Raven~ Alright, so when I started reading the part about how Dave was able to just look up the active superheros and now I'm rather confused. Is it ...

Hello there. So, I see that the point of this story is to be rather all over the place, so I'll refrain from commenting on that, but it still feels ...

Hello there! And welcome to YWS, hope you enjoy your self here ~ Alright, right off the bat, the first sentence pulls me out again. Why would anyone be counting ...

Hey, Dark Raven! I'll talk about a few things that stood out to me as I was readings some which may or may not have been mentioned already, but this ...

Hey, Dark Raven! Alright, so as I'm reading along, I'm starting to notice a lot more of these repeating words, such as except. I pointed on out a part or ...

Hey, Dark Raven! One thing that I had to point out, because I loved it so much - But why do I feel sad when I think about skool? Was ...