Soulkana

Hmm my curiosity tells me to ask what this was about since some of the words I have never heard of nor know what they mean. But other than that ...

Wow that was amazing. Was sitting on the edge of the stage of the school as I read this and almost dropped the laptop in shock and amazement. You did ...

First thing I wish it was longer. Also I was surprised that you didn't have much description. And it leaves very many questions left unanswered, who was the young man? ...

Very descriptive. I just wish it was longer, there is so much more you could tell in this. I couldn't see any spelling errors at this moment. I really sincerely ...

Sargon gazed out of the small window in his cell. The floor was damp and cold, the sound of guards just outside filled the many halls of the prison. Sitting ...

"Let me out, dammit!" i I screamed, kicking the wall hard enough to hurt myself. I had been running from Dr. Shay and her goons since I was fourteen, and ...

‘Twas in a broad afternoon breeze, that I found myself strolling in the green , grassy school oval grounds , playing with some little green hoping creatures when fate seemed ...

She tried moulding me into a brilliant tool. Even though I always played a fool Yet deep down I always knew Her work was undoubtedly true! She was more than ...

I only have the suggestion to shorten the lines but other than that; that is all the corrections I have. Fear fogs the mind; you clench your eyes as you ...

He channels heat through me with every look Every gaze he gives me sends shivers If only he knew, if only he knew If only he knew I exist If ...

I would shorten the lines so that the poem flows smoother^^ Here's a suggestion I was walking and I was whistling, I was quite happy that day That was before ...

A tree in a field Speaks to me In a manner of bewild' I don't know why but it does and no matter how I try to look away, I'm ...

They say home is where the heart is, Which is most-likely true, In that case, I should be over-seas with you. I pray to God, as days pass, 'Let him ...

I've already let go of your hand, yet you still hold on; You think I'm there beneath you, but the truth is that I'm gone. With the wind I have ...

Awesome poem although I'd change it so the lines are short, by hitting enters on some commas such as this: I think back to the days of when I loved ...