I enjoyed reading this. The end kinda hit home ("where the heart is" ). It's so sad! I think the poem could have flowed better, and I didn't really like that the majority of your stanzas didn't have a rhyming pattern, but it seemed as if the rhyming appeared randomly. Maybe that's just me. Other than that, your grammar is pretty good, and you've created a good poem. I like it .
AdoxagraphyAngelus wrote:Two letters came that day,
One from him,
and one filled with grief.
The letter that mattered,
It said, "C'mon, baby, be strong."
"Move on for me."
Ugh, the sadness.
Keep writing!
xoxo,
Kiicoh.
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