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Re: A Luna Corman Novel, 1.1
Hmm this is very interesting and leaves me many questions like What will happen next? Good plot and it seemed to run smoothly as far as I can tell...lol. Anyways ...
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Re: A Little Boulder (Bolder)
Well that was a truly intriguing and amusing poem. The boulder wanting to be human haha. It worked out marvelous lols. Good descriptions and it made me think back to ...
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Re: Progne Subis
Very good job. The descriptions and the emotion painted a very well done picture of this person. It made me cry at the end which is usually always good HAHA. ...
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Re: Night time
I like this it is very descriptive. Its like you're painting a scene with this. I loved this very much ^^ Hopefully you will keep writing!!!! I can't wait to ...
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Re: Soraya
I liked this very much!!! Awwws she left? I hope you add more I want to know so badly what happens next ahaha!!! Good luck and hopefully you get more ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Moment
Good luck and Amazing. I'm happy I read this. I could feel the emotion and can't wait to see more. Keep up the good work I plan to read more ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: The Butcher's Son: A Novella (Prologue)
Very good. I love how you did this through the point of view of the man who died. It gives very emotional and descriptive insight. Hope to read more of ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: The American Dream
This is well done. Very beautiful and descriptive. I would shorten the lines so you can read it better. Other than that I can't see any spelling errors or grammar ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Obsession
I really love this, my only problem is there isn't any emotion? What is it you want us to feel from this? It leaves me wondering. It sounds great you ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Fighter Worth Fighting For
This is beautiful I love!!! I love the emotion you put into this. It makes it feel so alive and thrilling. The emotion in this is very easily seen which ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: 'Til Death Do Us Part - Chapter 1
Good job; though I say like the others before me this is rushed a bit. You need to add some background into it. I have many questions that make me ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Prologue: Broken
The only correction I have is in one of the first few paragraphs. One says DENT but I think you meant to say DENY. Other that this is a very ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Deleted
This is made me sad. Made me cry because it was so beautiful..and amazing. I love it so much and can't wait to read more haha. Good luck ok? Keep ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Invisible
I really like this. I could feel the emotions in it and understand it very well. This made me grin because you sorta described my personality to my school LOL. ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Getting to Know You
Well this was a very interesting topic and I can see the logic in it. Hopefully this gets many reviews. You explained it rather well and made me laugh at ...
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