Someguy

Well... I liked it. It was a nice short poem. The problem. No stanzas :cry: It will not only improve the reading, it will also give it a kinda vibe. ...

Well, let me say that I think this could be the beginning of a good romance. (If it ends up that way) Now, I'm not the romance type,but I'll use ...

All right, let's start. The newest addition to his collection was a scar that slithered over his left eye, went down next to his nose and ended above his upper ...

I will say that it wasn't bad nor was it good. There was a few spelling errors and alot of repeating for example: “Fuck! Fuck, fuck, fuck, fuck, fuck!” Just ...

Hey there! I think it is a nice country song and has a nice rythym. I haven't been on for 2 months so I won't talk much, just got to ...

This has real potential,but you're not using it! You can make it longer because when I finished, I had the feeling it would go on, but it didn't.I was waiting ...

This was good, I really liked it. You used a different rhyming scheme and it went well. And when a thief Comes and cuts his neck, He'll fade to be ...

This good, with your flaming snakes of tempered steel You lost me there. As I see the ruby rivers flowing from the gorges that you carved in my soul, I ...

This was really short. You need to give more detail. You must also check your spelling, you made a few stupid mistakes. T-whack! I whip my head around. "Oh no!" ...

Is this a song, because if it is, you need to put it under lyrics, not lyric poetry. I don't know. You need to work on it a bit. I ...

This was excellent! Well done! The way describe her pain and how she stood up in the end and... Akhvzl I love this. At first I cried Protected myself As ...

I'm not sure. It is good and the idea, but it is too short. There is alot of things you can say and there is alot of potential, but you're ...

I think it was all right. There is a spelling mistake over here Love came, and brought sorrow Too soon in her train Yet so sweet, tht tomorrow It was ...

I don't know... There is a few things that I like, but then there is the parts I dont like. I'll start with the things you need to work on. ...

I think it is good. I think you could make some changes. I’m on the verge of dieing. I’m stuck inside my class I want to burn the dreaded math ...