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Mmmm...Interesting. I like the use of your emotions and that's good. Imagination isn't really important here, because there wasn't really anything to imagine except for the pain, humiliation and frust

Okay. It wasn't really imaginative for me. You didn't put a lot of emotion into it. Some parts are confusing and have a strange way of describing something. Yes the ...

Well since I don't know you at all... First off. It was very short. It was a bit dull. You could have been a little more creative, seeing as you ...

I don't know. This didn't really have nice imagery and the tempo was off. Also that it was a bit confusing at some parts. Raised voices ignore the walls between ...

This was an odd poem for me. Though it is a little imaginative and you also told us what was happening, it just didn't fit with it. Also: I agree ...

Okay...This was weird...Really strange similes. The snow crunches under our feet like an old melon splitting. Dude this really freaked me out.How do you see a crushed melon like FREAKING ...

Hi again. Sorry to haunt you... This is a nice chapter. It kind of brings you out of the tense drama that was in the prologue. Also, there was funny ...

I think it is a good poem. Some of the stanzas were very imaginative while others had one or two words breaking it. I love the idea. Very creative. Also, ...

Okay... Nice. First of all: Write all the words out. Chat speak is not good. :cry: Secondly(and it's a common one.) You must write " i " like this: " ...

This was really... It was really unimaginative. I love the idea and it has a nice ring to it. It was just too short and dull. The sky is poetry; ...

I don't know. Usually when my imagination doesn't switch on, but I like some of the lines, I have no idea. I look down, eagle's eye. Okay this is a ...

Hi there. Welcome to YWS. Okay. I like it. Obviously it is the first chapter and so a lot has to happen in the future. Just for interest sake: Is ...

Okay... I don't know. This wasn't really good. I is a little boring. There are some parts that seem to have nice images, but mostly it is dull. It's a ...

I like it. The rhyming is good and that is nice. Elegant intricacy forever engraved, In the walls of vanity. Your emotion is your eyes, Your own critic you can’t ...

First of all. It was very short. Second, you didn't show me the pain. You didn't let me feel it and that is a downfall. It was boring and my ...