Sohini

Here's what I have to say: "Shining from the crowd" "from" seems a little dodgy. Would it be better to use shining "in the crowd", you stand apart from the ...

Strong stuff! The second stanza, imagery wise is the strongest. The bitterness is real. What I liked immediately about your poem was the hot and cold tropes, it is used ...

YWS welcomes you! I like the ending. It gives the feeling of yearning very well. You have used simple words, but well chosen and well placed words. I think it's ...

As a poem it's OK but aren't there too, too many of these "love you forever" poems? I don't want to sound rude but this theme has been trodden on ...

Ahh ... a refreshing depiction of snowfall. Very charming, I must say. However, some bits of the poem needs working on the rhythm. If you make an even meter throughout, ...

At your service, Spiko! First the errors/suggestions: your teeth would've chattered so much that you would've felt them falling off intensify the effects of being inside a freezer. Though he ...

Hey! Have you already submitted this to the magazine authorities? I reviewed this, so take a look. I have an affinity for magazine articles cuz I used to be in ...

Right. First the typo and grammar:Please punctuate your work and capitalize the I as in... As the sun comes up i look around Do be careful about the capitalization of ...

Hey this poem is really nice. Simple but not the ususal "I miss you" poems. I think the details you've put in in so few words make it very fresh. ...

This poem needs a lot of revising. I think it's really cliched and the rhyming sounds forced too. Sorry, but it really did not appeal to me much. Maybe you ...

Before I go into your poem, please Capitalize the M and G in Mahatma Gandhi in the note. You're writing a poem on the Father of our Nation (That's right, ...

Oh Wow!! That's absolutely a brilliant theme to come up with. I love photographing sunsets and this poem complete echoes my feelings. Firstly, great title and first line."Chasing sunsets" is ...

Quite a nice poem. First, I'd advice you to put in more punctuation marks. Please do that. The first stanza is very beautiful, the words are very well chosen. But ...

Congratulations on writing your first poem! *balloons and streamers* I like the fluidity of this piece. It's very fresh and precise. The short lines just add to the edginess of ...

That's a fresh poem indeed! Very well described...the mood of the concert hall is very well done. I like how the poem shifts from the guitarist's point of view to ...