Snorlax

First of all, go through and correct all the capitalization errors. Such as I* and the begining of paragraphs and sentences. Other than that, I love the consept of this ...

The only thing i wouls say would be is instead of " I can cry into your pillow and punch it if I'm angry." I'd say I can cry into ...

@Lumi I'm sorry, but excuse you? This is a wonderful piece of poetry and there is no need to be rude! Although you are not breaking any yws rules because ...

I agree but with the you're thing there are other places where that fix can be made too

I think ill do that! Thanks!

And i know that line is weird but i cant think of words to replace it.

Thanks for the advise! Darnit i always forget to capitalize the I's :)

Thanks to everyone who reviewed! I will make these changes asap!

Hey! Snorlax here for a review! (My first!) First of all, i think this is a great poem! Nice topic, but thatere are alot of minor issues. Capitalization. There is ...

Sorry I'm new to reviewing so i literally have no idea what I'm doing.

Would it be wrong to post it again, As a review?

(Ugh! I meant to post this as a review! Oh well.)

Thanks for the advice!

Thanks! Ill make sure to make those changes.