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The words "man" and "again" are similar enough for the rhyme to work. ^_^ And don't worry! You'll come up with a neato title soon, I'm sure... ;)

Eep. Why are there capitalized letters?

Aw! Thank ye very much! I used that line too... fun stuff. :D

Check out the date. I wrote this six years ago. ;) I laughed SOOOO hard when I read it. It really is quite terrible -- though it's funny. I was ...

I have to say, I like your other poem better. This is very sporadic, almost disturbingly so, flitting to one topic to another very quickly. Not sure I like it... ...

Aw... this is pretty stuff! I never realized you wrote poetry before. ^_^;;

Heheh... it sounds like a Christian rock song. Was that your intention? Also, I moved it to Lyrics. ^_^;;

Glad you liked it! And I edited your post slightly so it would fit. ;)

Hahaha, maybe I'm good enough, but the question is, am I too lazy to? ;) We'll find out soon! Trimmed up some of the fat... hopefully it's looking somewhat cleaner. ...

gyr>> glad you liked it! :D Phorcys>> aw... first person can be quite horrible at times if you don't connect with the main character. ;) Jiggity>> I would, I guess, ...

ZOMGAZ! THIZ STOEIRY WAZ SO FRIGGIN' AWSUM! I'll give you a better critique soon... honest.

Well... I think I overanalyzed it and said, "Wait... what if it wasn't the backwards order and skipped and jumped all over the place?" ...don't ask. I'm crazy like that. ...

Don't monkies have tails? :P

Yay! New tablet!

Okay... I've updated it with all my revisions. Better?