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No plagiarizing. *LOCKED*

Yeah! Wet dogs. So cute. I don't know if this is bad, but when I read it, I tried to picture it. And I tried to forget the title. And ...

Squallz>> Yeah, I know I'm not supposed to be replying to other people's critiques... but still! :D In the story Samson and Delilah, Delilah betrays Samson after Samson loves her. ...

*Moved to Other*

Wow... that's hilarious!! :lol: So whatever happened to the rest of FREAK? Is it ever going to acutally get published? ~Yoyo 8) ... after finals, I'll submit it in. Really... ...

Lovely stuff here! Was communism a bad thing back then? I seem to remember that America was trying to be "friends" with Russia, so it was still okay. A better ...

Don't rhyme. You're dealing with too much substance to worry about making every single line rhyme, and it's killing your poem. So write what you're really thinking, and screw any ...

No. I think the last section is superfluous.

This was nice to read. :)

This is what we like to call "a paragraph." Please, next time post a story or at least something a bit more continuous than this.

*moved to Nonfiction*

This really isn't a chapter. You need to develop it much more fully than this.

Hehe, fun argument! Let's move it somewhere else and let this place be for her comments. ;)

Eep! Those typos are fixed. And... what did you mean in that last part? :?

It's kind of a discontinued grocery list sort of poem, except instead of potatoes and marshmallows, you're ordering angst. :P