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The problem with that, Grif, is that "tattoos" does rhyme for the abaab pattern. But... then you're still stuck Tim, because this is the first definition that comes to mind ...

Er... one comment. This doesn't seem to fit in: "from your eyes; beautiful blues" I think it's because the word "blues" sounds kind of awkward on the end. Otherwise, I ...

LOL, yes, it's the ending that kills it. But I sort of like it... it doesn't get unnecessarily gory or anything. It's quite funny actually. ;)

Are you testing me? >.> .< I spotted your mistakes, but I assume since you noted them, you're.... I don't know, I can never figure you out. Anyhow, I got ...

Oops, I thought I read that you were finally just beginning to write fiction again. Sorry! I must've confused you with someone else... I remember a recent good story here, ...

And now I am going to rant on and on about how I hate your poetry... Just kidding. Cool poem. I liked it very much.

Good idea Grif! No... I'm not REALLY a 40 year old man. Otherwise, my word choice is all off.

Thanks everyone! Some of you have really good ideas as far as sentence structure. I wrote this when I was just learning third person, so I'm glad that you were ...

HA! And you thought it would never happen! I finally read all of this. I won't nitpick on every single little thing like I had been doing, because I would ...

Very vague, and didn't really make an impression on me, mostly because you didn't explain your term. And the italics are confuseing. Who is saying what?

Here's how you remember it: when you use too, you want to use something extra. So you add the extra o! I speed home and in ten minutes I was ...

The archaic meaning for cooties is lice. So when you read about a girl's cooties, and she's wearing a handkerchief that is soaked in kerosene, most likely she has lice. ...

Yeah. Generally, I go through the stories on the weekends, so that means if you post in a weekday, it's going to be overlooked. But towards the weekends... Don't let ...

Don't feel bad. There might have only been two entries, but that means that 500+ didn't even try. At least you did. Kudos for that. :)

And... this won! YAY!