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Grr.... I did look this over and started writing a critique, but then noooooooooooooooo... IE was stupid. When I get on my computer (I love Firefox) I'll try again, k?

The metering is off.

She felt comfortable. That was the first sensation she had. She could feel the sunlight gently hit her face - which was probably why she woke up. But that wasn't ...

They went near to his car. She tried to run, but he caught her quickly and then forced her in. "A tricky vixen, aren't you?" "Lemme go!" He ignored her ...

Chapter 2. Well... a little bit more than 16 pages anyway. I had it in Courier, double-spaced, and 12-pt.

For a second, I thought it said cow, and it was soooooo funny... but then I reread it. XD Even so, interesting imagery. :)

But sparrow doesn't rhyme... XD It's good for a first try. I remember my first real poem... *shudders* I was about your age, and it sucked. LOL! It was funny ...

I'm bumping this so that I'll see it easily for the next time I get on the computer. I'll comment on it when I have time.

Not yet... so many good religious books. XD

Definitely! When I give books a 10/10, it means the book has changed me in some way or another. Amazing book. :)

It's fun and cute. ^___^ And so true... *glares at long hair*

Oh no... Odysseus. Completely different guy. And he went around quite a bit...

Okay! Here I go! A blinding light hit me. actually hit me...hard in the face. Just a little thing: remember to captialize everything. ^_^ And I'm not quite sure the ...

I think the last line can be better if there's less words. It just seems a little wordy; less is more. But I did like it. As Gal said, deliciously ...

Pretty poem! Simple, good metering, not too forced, and lovely imagery. Pretty good job there... ;)