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Times of Sorrow

by Twitch111


This is a little poem I had to do in my Language Arts class. I hope you like. :P

Times of sorrow
Feeling hollow
Many follow
Times of sorrow
A young sparrow
Feels death wallow
Times of sorrow
Feeling hollow

P.S. This is my first try at poetry, so please be nice. :lol:


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Sat Oct 29, 2005 6:10 pm
Twitch111 says...



I am sorry for the confusion. In my profile I accidentally changed the year I was born when I changed it. Thanks for pointing that out, I changed it to how it is supposed to be. I am actually 12 years old.




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Yeah, I don't think sparrow goes well with this poem.

Great work! It kinda has a quick pace, I like that about it. I hope the teacher liked it, because I sure do!

Em, Snoink, how could you have written a poem at Twitch's age, when you are 17 and Twitch is 35?




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Thu Oct 27, 2005 1:12 am
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But sparrow doesn't rhyme...

XD

It's good for a first try. I remember my first real poem... *shudders* I was about your age, and it sucked. LOL! It was funny though.





i like that the title of dr jekyll and mr hyde makes a clear stance that the embodiment of one’s own evil doesn’t get a claim to the doctorate
— waywardxwallflower