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*closes ears* Nyah, nyah, not listening! Nah, just kidding. I like... random poetry. I've always been a fan of Shel Silverstein, Jack Prelutsky, and more, and I love the creativeness ...

Yeah, you're right about the second to last line. It just... came out that way, if that makes sense. And it was physics because my sister was freaking out about ...

True... when school time comes, I tend to write very quick poems and barely write any stories. :P But still! This was pretty. So these were the good ol' days ...

That would be an awesome Christmas present! He'll like it a lot. :)

It was really pretty and really descriptive. :)

It's sort of like the Hogwarts school song. Pick a tune, and let's all sing together!

I hate it when that happens... Good luck!

Haikus are 5, 7, 5 - not 5, 11, 5. Otherwise, the memories are coming back... I hate soggy rice crispies. >

I'm not sure what to do... compliment you on the work or for attempting the work in the first place. Sonnets elude me. Um... good job!

I have to agree with Natyr here... the first part of the poem is really strong, but as soon as you delve into a different subject, it loses its strength. ...

Now the last line seems too wordy. But at least the other lines seem to be a little more "with" the poem. Oh, don't you love poetry? ;)

I haven't a clue, lol. But, I think it may be in the future.

The question would be more like where did I not see the religious allegory! :shock: *grits teeth* Okay, I am about to sound insane, but you asked, so bear with ...

Oh, this IS nice! Um... yeah, that's all I have to say. You need to change the title. :P

Not invisable... invisible.