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Hi! First off, a little nitpick I found: For most, they will be able to bear it, but (for some) it will be the start of emptiness that will never ...

This is definitely the stronger part of the story! The ending is particularly interesting. I do think it's weird that he doesn't recognize his character at first, or wonder, "Hmm, ...

I agree with Kyllorac! The word choice was a little off. Make sure you straighten it out! Also, what was especially strange was your combination of a euphemism with a ...

Hi Fantasy! I'm not quite feeling this poem. I mean, it seems mostly like this poem is an excuse to talk say "blank-taker" over and over again. Why does it ...

Hi Persephoneia! :D One thing that I noticed was that this poem really wasn't that confident! Like, you had this metaphor that you wanted to run with, but it seemed ...

Hahaha... YWS is cheating on you with me. Just so you know! ;) My main critique would be that you mentioned this in the beginning: "Your involvement in my life ...

Yay, the Aztecs! Very interesting peoples! A couple of things... I wouldn't use "tiger" since that's not indigenous to that area. Maybe panther or leopard or something else? Also, I ...

Hi jas! :D This was a really sweet story! Well... a letter, really, but it told a sweet story. It kind of reminded me of Taylor Swift's song, You Belong ...

Your first sentence rocks on so many levels. Anyway! The main thing that I could see was that there are two main parts of your story. The humorous half and ...

Hi Ray! :D It feels strange that I am reviewing a poem that says that reviews are abhorrent, but hey, more ironic things have happened! ;) This was my favorite ...

Hey sillyducky! :D A very nice fairy tale of a story! At least, that's what I read it as! Now, this is a very scientific nitpick, but the dark side ...

Hi Maki! I changed the rating of this to 16+, since it had the f-word in it. ;) Now, as for your lyrics! I can see it as some sort ...

Hey Pen! Just a couple of things! Most of the time, this is a really cute romance! I love the scenery, I love how they're at the beach and just ...

Hi Jenny! :D I see that this is a romance novel! Yay! I've been kind of... addicted to those as of late, so I am really looking forward to this ...

Hi Lukan! :D Okay, so your poem! The first couple of lines are kind of weird. Like, it sounds like you're trying to use words to evoke some sort of ...